2014 – January 3 – The Meet Cute

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January 3 means “The Meet Cute” by Derek Osborne.

 

“It has been quite a week. Usually the boat is down by the islands this time of year but a series of contracts is keeping them up in Miami. They’re shooting two feature films and a Miami Blue episode. The Miami Blue crew, in particular, knows how to party.”

Here, we are dropped into character immediately, and invited to swim our way toward context. It’s an effective technique, particularly for a story centered strongly on character, which this one surely is. We meet Max, a widower in charge of this particular boat, as he is deluged by the demands of family (his sister, Pam, who is concerned that he has been diagnosed with cancer), career (docking this party yacht), and social pressure (these stars expect him to be cool, and he’s sort of, kind of, maybe in love with one of them).

Story action consists mainly of Max’s attempt to dock while simultaneously carrying on a phone conversation with his sister, and trying to catch the eye of the starlet he admires. It’s a lot more compelling than it sounds, which is a real credit to Mr. Osborne’s prose. There’s a good balance of light and dark moments to keep the action fresh, and the final twist, a real slap in the face to Max’s plans, sets us up nicely for the next installment. I like this story very much so far, mainly because I empathize with Max.

Three stories, three different approaches. I’m loving the variety. How about you?

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I live in beautiful New Castle, Pennsylvania with fellow writer, Susan Urbanek Linville, and a herd of reformed feral cats.

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6 Responses to 2014 – January 3 – The Meet Cute

  1. Guilie says:

    And yet another approach. Fascinating, isn’t it?

  2. susan tepper says:

    LOVE Derek’s story which pulled me right in, also. How could it not? It’s filled with action, all that boat stuff, and you are filled with the essence of the sea. Also loving the diversity of stories in the series.

  3. Yes, it is very active, and yet very little actually happens. This, I find excessively cool. Actions need not be large scale movements/confrontations in order to be effective. I hope I’ve learned a little something from these stories thus far. There is more than one way to hook a reader and reel her/him in.

  4. Mandy says:

    Love the setup here, and yes cool is the perfect word for this story.

  5. Michael Webb says:

    Very well done. Loved it. Could feel the narrator’s pain acutely

  6. Ah yes, good way to start this — all kinds of tension there in the set-up. And docking his megayacht while phoning and eyeing the woman he secretly loves — great details there.

    You’re right to point out this is more than an on-set drama. I’m curious about where Max’s story will go too. He’ll take a while to understand more deeply, I think.

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