Parch – Day 5

One submission today.

Story 1.

Over the sea the memory of my children is as a dream, fled.

Tell me that I am doing the right thing.

I am building a ship, with my bare hands.

This has taken, so far, over two years. It is not complete yet. I make it of metal, and oak.

I am afraid that it will not be done in time, for, like Noah, I have a presumption, a prognostication, a little inkling . . .

Something is coming home to roost.

Some memory becomes entangled in the present and so wages war against our senses . . .

Tell me that I am free! Tell me that I am brave! Tell me that you will follow me into the sea.

This opening certainly prepares me for the journey to come. It is epic, poetic, and ultimately rewarding. My overall impression, however, is that there is something missing, some small disconnect or blurred focus that keeps the story from quite succeeding as it should. Also, the overall imporession is one of water, wet, not parch. I could make a case for the story fitting, but it actually impresses me more as a part of the Steel Cities anthology.

I’ve asked the author for further information. I do hope this comes through. It’s very different, and haunting.

Share on Tumblr

About Stephen

I live in beautiful New Castle, Pennsylvania with fellow writer, Susan Urbanek Linville, and a herd of reformed feral cats.

Tagged , , . Bookmark the permalink.

4 Responses to Parch – Day 5

  1. Mandy says:

    I’ve just caught up with all of your Parch posts Stephen, another wonderfully dedicated job you’re doing.
    Big thanks to you, it’s great information and a very interesting process to follow.
    And thanks to all the writers too.

  2. Stephen says:

    I am caught up with subs, but it didn’t look like many folks were reading the posts so I didn’t bother for a couple days. I’ll do another post soon to hit the high points. I have accepted one story so far, and have a couple that may be rewritten based on comments (one is in the submission queue today I see).

  3. Laura Mollett says:

    Oh I’ve been reading these and getting a lot from them. I thought maybe you didn’t get any more submissions (and I’m glad to hear that’s not so.) Thank you very much for taking the time and effort to put them up.

    -commenting in case it helps to know there is interest…

    • Thanks Laura.

      I’m a couple days behind on subs right now (tricky week to navigate) but will be working through them tonight and tomorrow. I’ll try to get some posted here, especially those that bring a new issue to the table. When I started reading slush, I thought I was in for a smorgasbord of bad writing, but the truth is that there’s a small number of subs that really shine, and huge number that are competent to good, and only a few that are truly awful. Makes the job harder than I like, actually.

Leave a Reply

Your email address will not be published. Required fields are marked *